Better than Left4speed.
A Lot of Cliches
I think you were trying to much to be like an anime, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but in this flash it is. You picked up a lot of the stupid cliches (Demons, spiky haired people, "wacky" characters, unfunny fourth wall breaking, I could go on.) And the dialogue is abysmal in the same cliche-riddled, unrealistic way.
Secondly, the story has numerous problems. First of all, the main two characters (The primary of which is probably a self insert) fill out the old and unfunny Normal, or mostly normal, and wacky archtypes, which have been overused, primarily in webcomics. (glare at CAD) I'm sure you're probably sick of me talking about cliches by now, but they really downgrade the quality of the plot and characters by enormous amounts. I'm aware that this is supposed to be a funny flash, so the plot and characters shouldn't matter that much, but when it comes to humor they do (more of the characters than plot, really.) I find it hard to laugh at jokes that I've heard or seen before in various forms on numerous webcomics and animes.
Now for the final negative part of my rambling review, the art. I think it shares the same problems that plague the rest of this animation. No, not cliches, but trying too much to be like anime. I can't really tell if the characters are meant to be chibi-like or normal, but either way they aren't very well-drawn. If you really super seriously want to improve your art, I'd recommend to start drawing from life, not anime (not animating, just drawing okay?) Some books I'd recommend if you really want to learn how to draw well (including drawing anime) are:
Drawing from the Right Side of the Brain (Even if you don't want to draw from life, the tips on general drawing help a lot.)
Anything by Andrew Loomis (For proportions and anatomy of the body, which you still need in anime, and the face, which will also help a bit with anime drawing.)
Once you think you're okay at all the anatomy crap, (Not really good, okay will do) then I suggest moving back into anime. Once again, I really don't know if you want to seriously improve your artistic abilities, but if you do, that's the way to go.
One final nitpick I have about the art are the colors. A lot of the time they clash or just don't look very good at all. I would suggest looking up color theory, but this isn't really that big of a problem.
Anyway, now to the things I like about this animation. I applaud you for making such a long and complicated animation and sticking with it the whole way through. I know I could never do that. The animation itself is actually pretty good, and you must have a great knowledge of flash to be able to put together something this large.
I'll be looking forward to the next episode, and I must ask you to not take anything I've said personally. You don't really have to change the whole story/characters because of all these problems, in fact, that would be a a bad thing, it would really screw up the consistency. A slight change in the directions of a few of the characters, and some more witty dialogue (Like the flare and toothpicks joke) would be nice.
Overall I give you a 6/10, it has some problems, but I can see a lot of hard work was put into it.
It was funny, but try not to use JPEG sprites. They look really crappy.
It was a good concept, but it was poorly executed. Next time use better art and add bosses and things to make it less repetitive.
That was pretty damn fun. Entertained me for awhile. I pwned my enemy at the end with a dragon attack. It would be cool if you had an end cutscene.
This game gets real hard.
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